First Shoot - train scene

This is the first shoot that the other members of my group filmed as the train station, i copied and made my own cut of the clip which is the clip uploaded above. With the help of a discussion with Mr. Michie, I have realised that there are many problems with this clip. I have tried to be extremely harsh and critical of the clip  in order for it to re-filmed to perfection.

Looking at the clip and analysing it carefully, I have noticed;
- the background sound of the wind and people talking along with their footsteps has affected the clip. This could have been avoided if the correct sound equipment was used. 
- In the final shot where Aman walks out of the train station, the camera does not stand completely still and looks rough
-  In the same shot, Aman walks out of the train station and there is an attempt of a tracking shot / pan shot, however it does not track Aman's character correctly. Aman should of been in the centre of the shot at all times and it is crucial that the camera keeps up with the characters pace however in this shot, this has not occurred. 
- At the end of this shot, the camera also looks as if it has hit/bumped something as it has jolted a little.

Overall the continuity of the shot has ben completely missed, to someone who is newly watching this clip, they would have no idea that the two characters have a relationship together as the clip has not shown so. This therefore does not create the meaning and then tension for the audience that we need to create.

In order to help and to improve the clip, I have thought of the following ideas
- In the final stages of this clip, it is crucial that all four team members spend a few hours after the clip ha been edited together just focusing on the sound and the audio, adding in music and foley sound that we may need and lowering the level of the volume of the background noise in an attempt to disguise it. When this scene is re-filmed I will ensure that I am there and the correct sound equipment is used to ensure that the clip flows as best as possible. 
- The clip where Aman's character walks out of the train station needs to be completely re-shot and focused on a lot more than it was. It is important that the camera is kept completely still when looking at the character walk out, this is basic camera knowledge. The tracking shot must ensure that he is in the middle of the shot throughout the shot and discuss a stopping point that Aman and the person controlling the camera is aware of. 
- Also as another shot of a close-up to Aman's face to show acknowledgement of the other character to emphasise the fact that they do have a relationship with each other. This makes it clear to someone who has not seen this clip before. 

We have decided to disregard this scene, after finding out that we need permission from the train companies and from the council before we can film where we wanted to film, we realised that we did not have the time to wait around. We went back to the storyboarding stage and re-filmed this scene but outside of the school, the location we chose did not look as if it was being filmed at a school so therefore it did not effect the meaning that we were presenting to the audience.

As you can see form the screenshots above, it is not clear that we are filming at a school, We thought of it as a conference centre as an idea for us to work with. Also, through re-filming this scene, finding camera angles that worked was a lot easier, whereas when filming in Uxbridge, it was a public place so was difficult as people always walk in the way of the shot. In this new setting, we did not have this issue. I firmly believe that by re-filming, we have not only just gained more experience with problems and how to overcome them but we have also bettered ourselves and our opening sequence.